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The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graphs
shows
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 the proportion of both gender's involvement in home chores and the
time
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 spent on carrying each task in a day.The unit is measured in
minutes
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.
Overall
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,it is evident from the chart that both
males
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 and
females
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 mostly engaged in cooking and the longest
time
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 spent
on
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doing
a
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housework is nearly 90
minutes
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.
To begin
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 with,Cooking was the Major chore carried out by men and women at nearly 60% and 90% respectively.
Also
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,it is apparent that
females
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 carried out more cleaning than the
males
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 with about
20
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a 20
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% difference, but they were less interested in house repairs when compared to the guys with a figure that doubled that of the
females
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 at 21%.
Although
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, The percentage of Pet care
were
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was
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 nearly the same at 20% in
females
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 and 21% in
males
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.
Furthermore
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,the ladies spent a longer
time
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in
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cooking and cleaning at 85
minutes
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 and 67
minutes
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 each.
However
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,the guys spent twice the figure of the
females
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 which was 5% on home repairs, hitting the bottom of the diagram
while
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 the
time
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 spent on pet care was equivalent in both
females
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 and
males
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, minutes, males, females with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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