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WITH A FAST PACE OF MODERN LIFE MORE AND MORE PEOPLE ARE TURNING TOWARDS FASTFOOD FOR THEIR MAIN MEALS. DO YOU THINK ADVANTAGES OUTWEIGH THE ADVANTAGES?

#pace #life #people #fastfood #meals
In the contemporary era, where speed is demanded all the
time
, many people eat more and more fast
food
 in order not to waste
time
in
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food's
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food
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preparing
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. In my opinion, one of us should
invast
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invest
 on his or her main meal and try to keep it as healthy as possible, that's why I think that there
is
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 much more drawbacks than benefits of eating fast
food
. Meals
is
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are
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 one of the
imprtant
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important
 issues that we have to deal with in our daily lives. Preparing a good type of
food
 may take
time
.
Unfortenitly
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Unfortunately
, most of us
,
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 must work hard during the day and sometimes we don't really have
the
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enough
time
 or energy to cook.
for example
,
insteadly
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instead
, we can
easly
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easily
 order
a
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junk
food
 which we may get in just
few
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minitues
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minutes
 which
also
 tastes not bad, so why
to loose
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time
 and make
food
 by ourselves?
On the other hand
, meals that are bought outside are not
healthy
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 as the ones we prepare at home. When you cook your own meal, you always try to pick the best types of
contents
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content
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, you
also
 try to do that in a way that you keep away from methods that may destroy the useful
compenants
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components
 as it
done
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while
 preparing
a fast
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fast food
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food
,
for instance
, you would prefer not to use an oil to make
a
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chips,
instead
, you cut your fresh salad.
To conclude
, in my opinion,
main
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 meal is essential for our health, and we should do our best to choose the best materials to enter
to
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our bodies.
Inspite
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In spite
 of being
hurry
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 up or tired
at the end
 of the day, we
shold
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should
 take the extra mile and choose the most healthy diet.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast pace
  • turning towards
  • main meals
  • advantages
  • outweigh
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide variety
  • affordable prices
  • on-the-go
  • health risks
  • lack of nutritional value
  • obesity
  • negative impact
  • environment
  • opinion
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