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The pie charts show the percentage of energy that manufactured from six different sources in a particular country in the years 1985 and 2003.

The pie charts show the percentage of energy that manufactured from six different sources in a particular country in the years 1985 and 2003.
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In general, the amount of
power
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 produced from oil made up the largest proportion of the total share in both
years
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, regardless of a considerable decrease,
while
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 the energy production of other renewable resources accounted for the least.
Furthermore
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, hydrogen’s share didn’t change in
two
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the two
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years
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 studied. The amount of electricity produced from oil decreased considerably in the second
year
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  from 52 % to 39 %,
,
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 making it still the main source of
power
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. The figure for electricity produced from nuclear
power
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 was the second largest in the first
year
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, but it
also
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 saw a slight decrease in 2003, making it the third main electricity
power
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 in that
year
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.
However
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, the proportion of the electrical
power
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 manufactured from hydrogen remained unchanged at 4% in all
years
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 given. With respect to the figures that experienced upward trends, in the first
year
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, the figure for coal energy production was at 8 %, but it almost
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 in 2003 to 13 %.
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, natural gas resources grew by 10 % in 2003. Interestingly, the  amount of
power
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 that was generated from other different resources made up the least share in both
years
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 with 1% and 4%, respectively.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, years, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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