The bar chart beow shows the percentage of Australian men and women in diffrent age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010,

The bar chart beow shows the percentage of Australian men and women in diffrent age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010,
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The given bar chart provides information about the proportion of Australian males and females in various age categories who did exercise regularly by 2010.
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, it can be seen that the chart illustrates 6 groups, including 15 to 24, 25 to 34, 35 to 44, 45 to 54, and 65 and over in which the total percentage of female are higher than
men
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, except the first
group
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.
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, the three female groups from 35 to 64 made up the most regular in physical activity.
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the proportion of
men
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is lower than females,
men
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from 15 to 24 accounted for 52.8 compared to 47.7
percent
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in women.
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, the difference between males and females in the
last
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group
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, including
65
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and over
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insignificant, amounting to 46.7 and 47.1 respectively. The percentage of
men
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saw a decrease from 52.8 in the first
group
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to 39.5 in 35 to 44
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the amount of women rose sharply to 52.5 and continued steadily to 53.3 and 53 in the ages of 45 to 54 and 55 to 65.
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, the proportion of males in the latter
group
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was 45.1
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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