The bar chart beow shows the percentage of Australian men and women in diffrent age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010,
The given bar chart provides information about the proportion of Australian males and females in various age categories who did exercise regularly by 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that the chart illustrates 6 groups, including 15 to 24, 25 to 34, 35 to 44, 45 to 54, and 65 and over in which the total percentage of female are higher than men
, except the first group
. Furthermore
, the three female groups from 35 to 64 made up the most regular in physical activity.
While
the proportion of men
is lower than females, men
from 15 to 24 accounted for 52.8 compared to 47.7 percent
in women. Change the spelling
per cent
Nonetheless
, the difference between males and females in the last
group
, including 65
and over Correct pronoun usage
those 65
are
insignificant, amounting to 46.7 and 47.1 respectively.
The percentage of Wrong verb form
was
men
saw a decrease from 52.8 in the first group
to 39.5 in 35 to 44 while
the amount of women rose sharply to 52.5 and continued steadily to 53.3 and 53 in the ages of 45 to 54 and 55 to 65. However
, the proportion of males in the latter group
was 45.1 percent
.Change the spelling
per cent
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