The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
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The diagrams provided illustrate the processes of preparing
cement
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and how concrete is made from it,
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the various steps and equipments that are involved in their production.
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, it is obvious from the pictorial representations that limestone and clay are used to make
cement
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while
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,
cement
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produced act as one of the initial material in the concrete prepration
along with
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other materials.
Firstly
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, limestone and clay are crushed together to form a powder by a crusher which
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goes
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the mixer.
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the mixture
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it enters directly into a rotating heater which rotates the two compounds
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a hot flame is directly subjected
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them.
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this
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mixture falls on a conveyor belt which moves the powder towards a grinder where it is grounded finely producing
cement
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which is later packed into bags.
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to make the concrete, 15% of
cement
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is added into a big concrete mixer, to which 10% of water, 25% of sand and 50% of gravel is added.
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composition is mixed by rotating the
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and the concrete formed is utilized in construction works later.
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