The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.

The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.
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the comparison of the involvement of both sexes in four categories of household work. Units are measured in percentages and
minutes
respectively.
Overall
,
it is clear that
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the maximum portion of household activities are performed by
females
than that of
males
.
Conversely
, men perform house repair work more than
females
. With regard to cooking and cleaning, the maximum number of women participate in these tasks (around 80% and 60% respectively),
in contrast
,
males
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participation in these aspects is approximately 60% and 40% respectively.
Furthermore
, the average amount of time spent on cooking and cleaning by the
females
is about 85 and 69
minutes
respectively,
whereas
males
spend less amount of time behind these tasks (approximately 60 and 45
minutes
respectively).
On the other hand
, for pet care
males
participate a little bit more (approximately 1%) than
females
, thereby spending an equal amount of time.
Besides
, man participates and spends more
minutes
in hose repairs, amounting to around 19% and 19
minutes
respectively, with lesser involvement by
females
in these sectors (around 9% and 5
minutes
respectively).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, females, males with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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