The process presents information about the water cycle, an unceasing flow of water across and beneath the Earth’s surface.

The illustration presents information about the
water
cycle, an unceasing flow of
water
across and beneath the Earth’s surface. As can be seen from the diagram there are 3 stages in the natural cycle process starting with the evaporation of
Ocean
water
and finishing with the return of the
water
through
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the land back to the sea.
To begin
,the
ocean
contributes about 80% of total
water
vapour in
air
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, which rises into the clouds by
atmosphere
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. It
then
moves from the
ocean
to land, where the
clouds
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formation on the surface begins to precipitate the
rains
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in
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everywhere.
Therefore
the
water
that falls from the cloud falls in two different places, first of all ,to lakes or to the valley, which is clearly compatible in some ways. The second place of
cloud
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formation process is the side of a mountain,
afterwards
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afterwards,
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the
water
flows down to the ground by surface runoff. When the
water
or the groundwater gets close to the lowest grade the
water
becomes salty and will take it to the
ocean
.
Finally
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the cycle begins again with
evaporation
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the evaporation
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process.
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