The charts below show the proportions of British students at one untiversity in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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students
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2000 and 2010.
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years
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Spanish
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for students
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the other rates changed after 10 years.
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Spanish
and 'Another language
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language
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consistant
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consistent
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after English for the British Students
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