The graph below shows the percentage of dependents in 2000 and predicted figures in 2050 in five countries, and also gives the world average.
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, percentages of dependents
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except for Korea were higher than the world average in 2000. Interestingly, the rates of dependents
in India, Indonesia and China will be estimated to decrease lower than the world average in 2050.
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is predicted to rise from nearly 40% to around 30%, between 2000 and 2050.
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