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Table The table below shows the average band scores for students from different language groups taking the IELTS General Test in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Listening Reading Writing Speaking Overall German 6.8 6.3 6.6 6.9 6.7 French 6.3 6.1 6.5 6.6 6.5 Indonesian 6.3 6.1 6.1 6.7 6.3 Malaysia 6.2 6.4 6.0 6.6 6.4

Table The table below shows the average band scores for students from different language groups taking the IELTS General Test in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Listening Reading Writing Speaking Overall German 6.8 6.3 6.6 6.9 6.7 French 6.3 6.1 6.5 6.6 6.5 Indonesian 6.3 6.1 6.1 6.7 6.3 Malaysia 6.2 6.4 6.0 6.6 6.4
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The table depicts the mean
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 scores for candidates from four various
language
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groups
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 who took the
ielts
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 general test in a particular year (2010).
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, it is noticeable that
students
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groups
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) performed better than the Asian
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groups
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 (Indonesian and
Malaysia
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).
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german
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students
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 scored the highest
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 scored least. On the one hand,
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students
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 of 6.8 in listening, followed by French with a
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 of 6.3. Meanwhile, in reading, both European
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groups
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) scored least, recording 6.3 and 6.1
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. Comparatively in writing, they scored better than in reading with
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 scores of 6.6 and 6.5 in both
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groups
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 respectively.
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 in speaking,
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students
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 performed better with
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 highest
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score
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 of 6.9
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 among all the four languages with a
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6.5
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, in listening, the two Asian countries ( Indonesian and
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) scored 6.3 and 6.2
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,
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 did better In speaking with
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 scores of 6.7 and 6.8 each, with
Malaysia
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, french and
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 performed poorly in reading,
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 performed better.
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