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Table The table below shows the average band scores for students from different language groups taking the IELTS General Test in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Listening Reading Writing Speaking Overall German 6.8 6.3 6.6 6.9 6.7 French 6.3 6.1 6.5 6.6 6.5 Indonesian 6.3 6.1 6.1 6.7 6.3 Malaysia 6.2 6.4 6.0 6.6 6.4

Table The table below shows the average band scores for students from different language groups taking the IELTS General Test in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Listening Reading Writing Speaking Overall German 6.8 6.3 6.6 6.9 6.7 French 6.3 6.1 6.5 6.6 6.5 Indonesian 6.3 6.1 6.1 6.7 6.3 Malaysia 6.2 6.4 6.0 6.6 6.4
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The table depicts the mean
band
 scores for candidates from four various
language
groups
 who took the
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IELTS
 general test in a particular year (2010).
Overall
, it is noticeable that
students
 from the two European
language
groups
 (
german
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 and
french
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) performed better than the Asian
language
groups
 (Indonesian and
Malaysia
).
Furthermore
,
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students
 scored the highest
while
indonesians
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 scored least. On the one hand,
german
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students
 had the highest
score
 of 6.8 in listening, followed by French with a
band
score
 of 6.3. Meanwhile, in reading, both European
language
groups
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german
 and
french
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) scored least, recording 6.3 and 6.1
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. Comparatively in writing, they scored better than in reading with
band
 scores of 6.6 and 6.5 in both
language
groups
 respectively.
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 in speaking,
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students
 performed better with
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 highest
band
score
 of 6.9
while
 French recorded the
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 among all the four languages with a
band
score
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Conversely
, in listening, the two Asian countries ( Indonesian and
Malaysia
) scored 6.3 and 6.2
consecutively
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,
however
 did better In speaking with
band
 scores of 6.7 and 6.8 each, with
Malaysia
 being the second to highest. It is interesting to know that, there was an inverse relationship.
Although
german
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, french and
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Indonesian
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 performed poorly in reading,
malaysia
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Malaysia
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 performed better.
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