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The diagrams show the problem of flooding in a UK town and two possible solutions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

There are three maps that illustrate a flooding incident in a UK
town
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 and compare
two
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 potential measures.
According to
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 the
first
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 map, there were
two
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 rivers joined in the middle of the
town
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, one named
River
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 Awl through the
town
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 from west to east, another called
River
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 Bole from north of the
town
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 to the junction. About half of the land in
this
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town
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 was affected by flooding including the Industrial Park and Residential Area respectively on the west and east of
River
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 Bole.
Additionally
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, The Commercial district on the south of the
River
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 Awl was
also
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 destroyed. The
first
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 solution to refurbish
this
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town
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 is to relocate these three buildings. To be specific, the Industrial Park and Residential Area will be moved to the north of their original location. Simultaneously, a new Commercial district will be constructed in the south of its original location. The benefit of
this
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project
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 is that the
river
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 environment can be maintained, but it may cost enormous funding. Compared with the
first
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project
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, the second solution can save a lot of money. In
this
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project
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, a dam will be erected on the source of
two
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 rivers, transforming rivers into reservoirs.
Besides
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, the original riverbeds will be reconstructed into channels.
Although
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this
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project
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 needn't remove three buildings, a large number of lands will be transformed into reservoirs.
Overall
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, these
two
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 solutions respectively have their own merits. The
first
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 measure can minimize the damage to the environment and another solution can save enormous money.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, two, first, river, project with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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