today the high sale of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not real needs of the socity in witch they are sold. to what extend do you agree or disagree?

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advertisement
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high sales of popular consumer goods in some
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.
this
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power
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the power
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of advertisement can encourage some individuals to buy some items that are not
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necessary
. First of all, advertising is often for
product
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and services that we do not really need.
in
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recent days there are lots of
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advertisements
on television and other social
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media
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. people who are eager to buy items that are gorgeous and they do not pay attention to their needs.
for instance
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instead
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of
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product
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they try to buy some goods witch are
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although
they do not really need the
product
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it
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to buy some
product
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products
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that are not
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necessary
.
Secondly
,the ultimate aim of advertising is to subtly persuade people to
by
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things. In
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decade
tcnologi
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the technology
of advertising has
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siginificant
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significantly
changed
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on social media.
in
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advertiser
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advertisers
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try to use these technologies to
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way
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to
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purches
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products
for instance
,
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pictures or
medias
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media
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are great
way
.
to conclude
the ultimate goal of
avdertiment
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advertisement
can be sale more
product
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products
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.
Moreover
.
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advertisment
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advertisement
advertising
advertisements
is a good
way
to tempt
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customers
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,
but
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it can be
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way
to buy items,
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if
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customers
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do not have enough time to shop around they can rely on advertising to learn about
product
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products
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. But
this
way
is not
benefical
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beneficial
most of the time. By the
way
of conclusion, advertisement
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can
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be power full on
individuals
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mind to buy unnecessary products
also
it should be avoided
in
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most of the time
for buying
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to buy
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effactivly
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effectively
effective
.
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