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The given graph shows the consumption of fast food in the UK (per week) from 1970 to 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given graph shows the consumption of fast food in the UK (per week) from 1970 to 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#consumption #food #uk #week #information #features #comparisons
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the counsumption
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counsumption
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consumption
 of street food
such
 as
Hamburger
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hamburgers
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,
fish
 and
chips
also
 pizza in a week ,between 1970 and 1990 in England .
overall
,it can be seen that the
amount
 of
consumer
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consumers
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 that ate
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 and
fish
 with
chips
was increase
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was increased
was increasing
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 dramatically ,
however
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,
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people ate pizza less than other fast foods
at the end
 of
the
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apply
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1990 year. regarding
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the
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that
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the
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 two junk
foor
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food
 that had a
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lot
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lot
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lots
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lot
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 of
costumer
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customer
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apply
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that
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they are hamburgers and
fish
 with
chips
 , in 1970 there was
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a
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a
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significant
rose
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rise
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in the
amount
 of consumption which
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was
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stood at around 50
costumer
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customers
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then
 reached
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to
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500 ,that was the highest
amount
 of citizens that ate
fish
 and
chips
 ,
however
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,
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the
dentency
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sentence
tendency
 for hamburgers were
dramatic
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 jumped in 1990 from about 30 to 300 costumers.
Despit
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Despite
of
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this
 , at
the
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began
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beginning
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in
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of
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 1970 people ate pizza more than others ,
although
this
amount
was fall
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fell
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 quickly in 1990
frome
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from
 300 to 200 consumers.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, chips, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fast food
  • UK
  • 1970
  • 1990
  • increase
  • stable
  • hover
  • peak
  • popularity
  • double
  • comparison
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