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The given graph shows the consumption of fast food in the UK (per week) from 1970 to 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given graph shows the consumption of fast food in the UK (per week) from 1970 to 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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counsumption
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consumption
 of street food
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Hamburger
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,
fish
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chips
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 pizza in a week ,between 1970 and 1990 in England .
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,it can be seen that the
amount
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consumer
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consumers
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 that ate
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 and
fish
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chips
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was increase
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 dramatically ,
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people ate pizza less than other fast foods
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1990 year. regarding
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that
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foor
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food
 that had a
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lots
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costumer
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customer
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that
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they are hamburgers and
fish
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 , in 1970 there was
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significant
rose
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amount
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 of consumption which
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stood at around 50
costumer
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customers
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 reached
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500 ,that was the highest
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 of citizens that ate
fish
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dentency
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tendency
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dramatic
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 jumped in 1990 from about 30 to 300 costumers.
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began
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 1970 people ate pizza more than others ,
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amount
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was fall
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 quickly in 1990
frome
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from
 300 to 200 consumers.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, chips, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fast food
  • UK
  • 1970
  • 1990
  • increase
  • stable
  • hover
  • peak
  • popularity
  • double
  • comparison
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