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These pie charts show how the rates of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) change in 2015 and 2040. It clear from the graph that the energy capacity increased about 5 GW from 6.688GW to 11.678GW in 2015 and 2040. According to what is shown, fossil fuels was highest ratio in both this two years with a 64 percentage in 2015 and it decreased to 44% in 2040. Also, the other renewable energy was fall almost 2% from 2015 until 2024. While the solar energy was lowest energy in 2015 it jump from 2 percentage to 18 percentage in 2040. Moreover, the wind energy go up sharply from 5% in 2015 to 12% in 2024. However, almost 1% was drop from this two year in nuclear energy, with a 6 percentage in 2015 to 5 percentage in 2040. To sum up, we could say that the fossil fuels followed by other renewable were the highest in this period.

These pie charts show how the rates of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) change in 2015 and 2040. It clear from the graph that the energy capacity increased about 5 GW from 6.688GW to 11.678GW in 2015 and 2040. According to what is shown, fossil fuels was highest ratio in both this two years with a 64 percentage in 2015 and it decreased to 44% in 2040. Also, the other renewable energy was fall almost 2% from 2015 until 2024. While the solar energy was lowest energy in 2015 it jump from 2 percentage to 18 percentage in 2040. Moreover, the wind energy go up sharply from 5% in 2015 to 12% in 2024. However, almost 1% was drop from this two year in nuclear energy, with a 6 percentage in 2015 to 5 percentage in 2040. To sum up, we could say that the fossil fuels followed by other renewable were the highest in this period.
These pie charts show how the rates of
energy
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 capacity in gigawatts (
GW
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) change in 2015 and 2040. It
clear
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 from the graph that the
energy
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 capacity increased
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 5
GW
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 from 6.688GW to 11.678GW in 2015 and 2040.
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 what is shown, fossil fuels was
highest
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the highest
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 ratio in both
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 two years with
a
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64
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 in 2015 and it decreased to 44% in 2040.
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, the other renewable
energy
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almost
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 2% from 2015 until 2024.
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solar
energy
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lowest
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the lowest
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energy
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 in 2015 it
jump
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 from 2
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percentage
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 to 18
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percentage
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per cent
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 in 2040.
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,
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wind
energy
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 go up sharply from 5% in 2015 to 12% in 2024.
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, almost 1% was
drop
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dropped
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 from
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this
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these
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 two
year
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 in nuclear
energy
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, with a 6
percentage
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 in 2015 to 5
percentage
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 in 2040.
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, we could say that
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fossil fuels followed by other
renewable
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renewables
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 were the highest in
this
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 period.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gw, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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