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The chart below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world

The chart below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world
#show #percentage #water #purposes #six #areas #world
The pie charts
illustrates
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 the
proportion
 of
water
 allocation
on
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in
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 three different
area
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areas
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in
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on
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 six continents.
Overall
, even though not all countries come across
with
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the same
proportion
 of
water
 usage,
yet
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evedently
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evidently
 most countries
used
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 the most
water
 for
agricultural
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agriculture
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. Central Asia by far
have
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 the highest
proportion
 for agricultural at 88%, have the lowest allocation on industrial by 5%, and for domestic use at 7%.
Moreover
, Africa and South East Asia share slightly the same number
on
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of
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water
 usage. Africa
exploit
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uses
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 84% of
water
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its water
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on
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for
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the
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apply
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agriculture
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agricultural
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 product, 9% for housing and 7%
on
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for
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 industrial,
while
Sout
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Southeast
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 East Asia use 81% of
water
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its water
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, 7%
on
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in
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 domestic area and 5%
on
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for
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businesses purpose
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business purposes
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. On top of that, North America
also
 share nearly the same
proportion
with
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as
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 Europe.
While
 in North America 48% of
water
exploited
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 for commercial, 39% on farming, and 13% on household purpose, Europe consume 53% of
water
on
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in
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 factory or manufacturing area, 32% on harvesting and 15% on housing. South America may differ
among
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from
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 the mentioned countries.
Water
 consumption
on
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in
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 farming at 71%, housing
on
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at
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 19% and commercial
on
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at
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 10%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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