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The bar chart below show the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make the comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below show the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make the comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the proportion of
Austalian
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Australian
 people who did physical activity in different
age
 groups and genders in 2010. 
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the female at 65 years
have
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 as much as
at
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approximately 46 to 47
percent
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.
In addition
, the percentage of Australian
women
 doing physical activity
are
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is
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 higher than the percentage of
men
 in every generation except teenage
age
.
To begin
 with, both genders at 15 to 24 tend to
had
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 the highest percentage of
doing
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exercise
excercise
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exercise
,  the proportion of
male
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males
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 who
doing
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do
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excercise
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exercise
 is 52.8 per cent,
whereas
women
 had 47.7 per cent. During the teenage
age
,
men
 and
women
 had the smallest difference around 5 per cent. Around middle
age
,
women
 and
men
 had a gap between each
others
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, the
percentahe
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percentage
 of
men
 did
excersice
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exercise
 more than
women
 around 3-5
percent
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per cent
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. In conclusion, in 2010
men
tend
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 to
doing
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do
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 physical activity more than
women
 in
Australian
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Australia
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 except
in
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during
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juvenile
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the juvenile
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 period of
age
.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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