The table below shows the proportion of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998.

The table below shows the proportion

of income spent on 4 common items

in the UK in 1998.
The table below illustrates the four spending categories dan the
propotion
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proportion
spent between UK
adults
and children in 1994. Overview, in general
adults
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adults,
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spent
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the most on food
while
children have the least expenses
on
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in
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that category. Spotted Videos was the category where younger people spent the most of their
fund
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funds
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while
adults
spent the least on that. In general,
adults
spent
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spend
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one fourth
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one-fourth
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of their salary on their diet. Both
Adults
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Adult
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women and men spent 39% and 14% of their income respectively.
For expenses
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on electronic equipment and
music
were five times smaller than food expenses.
In addition
, only one
percent
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per cent
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of their salary
that
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apply
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went to video with men
spent
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spending
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2% and women
spent
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spending
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0.5% of their income. For
children
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children,
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their biggest expenditure
were
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was
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on
music
. Girls
was
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were
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the biggest spender on
music
among others with 40% of their fund spent
of
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on
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music
and with less than two
percents
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percent
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, boys were the second biggest spender on the same item.
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, both boys and girls were only
pay out
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paid
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9% and 11% of their savings on cuisine.
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