The table below shows the proportion of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998.
The table below illustrates the four spending categories dan the
propotion
spent between UK Correct your spelling
proportion
adults
and children in 1994.
Overview, in general adults
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adults,
spent
the most on food Wrong verb form
spend
while
children have the least expenses on
that category. Spotted Videos was the category where younger people spent the most of their Change preposition
in
fund
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funds
while
adults
spent the least on that.
In general, adults
spent
Wrong verb form
spend
one fourth
of their salary on their diet. Both Add a hyphen
one-fourth
Adults
women and men spent 39% and 14% of their income respectively. Fix the agreement mistake
Adult
For expenses
on electronic equipment and Change preposition
Expenses
music
were five times smaller than food expenses. In addition
, only one percent
of their salary Change the spelling
per cent
that
went to video with men Correct pronoun usage
apply
spent
2% and women Wrong verb form
spending
spent
0.5% of their income.
For Wrong verb form
spending
children
their biggest expenditure Add a comma
children,
were
on Change the verb form
was
music
. Girls was
the biggest spender on Correct subject-verb agreement
were
music
among others with 40% of their fund spent of
Change preposition
on
music
and with less than two percents
, boys were the second biggest spender on the same item. Fix the agreement mistake
percent
In contrast
, both boys and girls were only pay out
9% and 11% of their savings on cuisine.Wrong verb form
paid
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