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The percentage of people who were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting this main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
people
 who were born in
Australia
 and
people
 born outside
Australia
 in three different
areas
 in 1955 and 2010.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the number of
people
 living in cities
are
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 the highest,
while
 the population in
town
 and rural
areas
 saw a downward trend between 1955 and 2010. In detail, the proportion of
people
 born in
Australia
 living in cities was 50% in 1995 and over 60% in 2010,
while
 the figure for the
town
 and rural
areas
 stood at 20% and 30% respectively. In 2010, the percentage of
people
 who were born in
Australia
 opted for living in
Town
 and rural
areas
 was similar below 20%.
In addition
, in terms of
people
 born outside
Australia
 living in cities experienced a surge from 60% to 80% between 1995 and 2010,
while
this
 figure for
people
 living in
town
 was merely stable. Rural
areas
 witnessed
an
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 decrease from 40% to under 10% in the proportions of
people
 choosing to live in these
areas
.
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