You have a problem with a recently hired employee in your workplace. Write a letter to the HR manager. In your letter describe the problem the new employee has caused explain how other colleagues feel about the new employee's conduct say how you expect the manager to address the situation.

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regarding the misconduct and unethical behaviour

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the new hire Jatin Behal in my team. Let me explain

you

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in detail. The problem started one month ago when he got hired. I noticed that he

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using

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personal purpose, and

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, when I pointed out him he said “

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away from me” in a rude tone, which I believe is unethical.

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, one of my

team-mate

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told me that he has disrespected her over teams.

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asked her for a personal favour, for which she had sent an email to me with a screenshot from the

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chat. For your

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, I have attached her email. I request you to please take appropriate action on him, and please change his team because my team members have said that they would not be able to continue to work with him. Awaiting your prompt reply. Yours Faithfully, Jaskaran Singh Awal

KaranAwal15Thu Nov 02 2023

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task response

Ensure that all the required information is included in the letter. Specifically, mention the problem the new employee has caused and explain how other colleagues feel about the new employee's conduct.

coherence cohesion

Ensure a clear and logical structure in the letter. Use paragraphs to separate different ideas.

lexical resource

Improve the range of vocabulary used in the letter. Explore synonyms and varied expressions to enhance the language.

grammatical range

Check the grammar and sentence structure of the letter. Pay attention to verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and sentence clarity.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

161 words

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You have a problem with a recently hired employee in your workplace. Write a letter to the HR manager. In your letter describe the problem the new employee has caused explain how other colleagues feel about the new employee's conduct say how you expect the manager to address the situation.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

In many countries, the government prioritises economic growth above all other concerns. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.

We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer-based technology. How do you think this will change in the future? Is it good for us to rely so much on computers?

The use of mobile phones is as antisocial as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places so mobile phones should be banned like smoking. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Agree or Disagree)

It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science as a subject. What are the causes? And what will be the effects on society?