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49.The table presents how much people from five employment sectors earned, in three different salary levels in 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

49.The table presents how much people from five employment sectors earned, in three different salary levels in 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table displays information about the income in different sectors, separated by
salary
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 levels, in the year 2009.
Overall
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, people working in the finance sector have the highest remuneration among the others,
while
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 transportation has the biggest difference between the maximum and minimum
salary
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. Individuals working in the finance area, have an average earning of 5225
pounds
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, which is the highest amount compared with the other sectors, with a minimum
salary
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 of 1600
pounds
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 and a maximum of 8850
pounds
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. Transportation has the next highest maximum
salary
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, with 4580
pounds
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, it had a difference of around 3500
pounds
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 with the lowest
wage
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, which is 843
pounds
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, and an average of 2712
pounds
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. Construction and hospitality’s highest earnings only have a difference of 200
pounds
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, with 3100
pounds
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 in construction and 2900
pounds
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 in hospitality,
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 the minimum
wage
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, for people who work in hospitality is 890
pounds
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, which is 100
pounds
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 higher than the minimum
wage
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 of construction workers.
Finally
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, manufacturing has an average
wage
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 of 2215
pounds
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, and a minimum
wage
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 of 930
pounds
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, ranking third for the maximum
wage
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, with 3500
pounds
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salary, pounds, wage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
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