The charts show the percentage of boys and girls aged 5-14 taking part in cultural activities and sports in Australia in 2003.
These bar charts show the genders from 5 to 14 years ratio about
sport
, dancing, drama, singing and playing musical instruments in Australia in 2003. It is clear from the graph that the boy has the lowest percentage, Fix the agreement mistake
sports
while
the girls have the highest.
According to
what is shown in the first graph drama and signing activities take similar behaviour for girls and boys according to
5% and 4%. Whereas
, the boy has 2 per cent in dancing but girl
takes 25 proportion. Add an article
the girl
However
, girl
in play musical instrument has less than 5% of them
bay.
Correct your spelling
the
Moreover
, in second
chart, because the boy has a strange body they reached 70%. Change the article
the second
while
girl
has 45%.
Add an article
the girl
a girl
To sum up
, we could say that girl
has more percentage in culture
activities except in playing musical instrument and sport.Replace the word
cultural
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