The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in 

Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and 

make comparisons where relevant.
the bar chart illustrates the figure of people divided by gender in the UK who attended
further
education, whether they were studying full-time or part-time between the years 1970 to 1991.
overall
, it is clear to
both
genders that more
students
are enrolled in part-time than in full-time studies over the time periods. female academic attendees have steadily increased over the years,
while
male
students
tend to slightly
fluctuated
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.
according to
the graph, in part-time education, from 1970 to 1971 men started off higher with 1,000,000
students
whereas
women were nearly 800,000 people. in the second period, the number of men dropped by almost 200,000 and women rose to around 100,000. by the end of the year from 1990-1991,
both
sexes are increasing.
however
, women are striking the highest peak for nearly 1,200,000 academic attendees.
furthermore
, full-time education
students
are generally low in three periods of time. but there is a trend that over the years there has been a steady increase in
both
sexes. it is noted that in the beginning, the male student was higher (100,000) than the female (50,000). and
then
in 1990-1991,
both
genders shared
equal
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amount of enrolled
students
around 210,000.
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