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The table below gives information on average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activities.

The table below gives information on average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activities.
The given table gives the details of the typical
hours
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 and minutes spent on a wide range of daily activities by UK people categorized based on their gender. Looking at the
overall
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 perspective, it is apparent that the
men
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 dedicated more
time
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 to work and study,
whereas
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 the
women
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 spent more
time
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 on housework affairs.
Moreover
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, sleeping
time
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 for
both
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 genders filled more than a third portion of their daily
time
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, which is even more than total
leisure
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time
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. The
time
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 consumption for
both
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 genders for each activity row is not significantly different for the other timetable outlines. In terms of sleeping
time
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,
both
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men
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 and
women
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 dedicated just above 8
hours
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 to sleeping
time
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 which is more than total
leisure
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time
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 with a cumulative value of around 5
hours
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 and
also
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 typical
hours
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 spent on working and studying with around 3
hours
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 and 45 minutes for
men
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 and two
hours
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 and a
half
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 for
women
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. Regarding
leisure
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 items,
half
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portion
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a portion
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 of
leisure
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time
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 was dedicated to dealing with media and multi-media devices
such
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 as watching TV, listening radio and so on. With regards to working and studying
time
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,
both
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 categories accounted for less than 4
hours
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 for
men
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 and two
hours
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 and a
half
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 for
women
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.
Also
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, household activities took three
hours
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 for
women
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,
whereas
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 the
men
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 spent less than two
hours
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 on house affairs. Regarding travelling,
both
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 genders spent around one hour and a
half
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 on travel. Except for social life and eating and drinking groups with around consumed
time
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 of one hour and a
half
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, neither of the other categories took more than one hour.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, whereas".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, men, time, women, both, leisure, half with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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