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You had recently ordered a book, online from a bookseller. The book sent by him was not the latest edition, even though you had paid the money according to the latest edition version. Write an email to bookseller in about 150-200 words. Your email should do the following things. 1.Complain about the service of the online site. 2.State about the urgency for the latest edition.

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Dear Bookseller, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the purchase of
book
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a book
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 at your store online.
Firstly
 , I ordered
5th
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the 5th
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Edition
 of
“Story
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the “Story
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 of Chicken Wings”
book
 from your store on 5th August. But I received
previous
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edition
 of the
book
 , I was very disappointed.
Moreover
, there is a $ 30 difference
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latest
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the latest
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edition
version
 to
previous
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edition
 and I paid
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according to
latest
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version
. Indeed, The online service of your store is not
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 as expected. One of my
friend
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also
 ordered a
book
 from your outlet ,
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and got
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different
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a different
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version
 of
book
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the book
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.
This
book
 is extremely urgent for me , as I have exams in
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 of days. I don’t have any other material or resources related to
this
book
. I request you return the latest
version
 of the
book
 which I had ordered. I appreciate
you
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 support and understanding of the issue and
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 a quick response from you. Regards, Dillirao.
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