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Some people think that punishment is the best way of teaching children to behave well. Others believe that it is better to reward children for good behaviour. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #punishment #children #reward #behaviour
In the present age, whether punishing
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 method of teaching children which
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 more benefits than
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 them with a
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 has sparked much debate. Some people assert that students who get hits by teachers will lead them to behave well,
whereas
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 that offering a
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 a good strategy for good behaviour. personally,
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 the latter view.
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convincing
 arguments
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 be made that using
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violence
 in education has a significant issue in
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personality
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,
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 and people will start avoiding them.
For example
, In some
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 there is a punch of
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students
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 that always trying to present
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 power to other weak
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 by fighting.
As a result
, they will get punished and drop out of
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school and they might destroy their future due
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 no education.
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Furthermore
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, punishing is an old
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,
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 has found that treating children from lower age are mostly presents result at younger age, It is a double sword if
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 raise his child he will sent to be what did he get from
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.
On the other hand
, feeding students will
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 that support them and
reward
 them as a gift
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 their
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achievements
 either in
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school
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 or outside home and
altimately
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ultimately
, they
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fuel success
.
For instance
, In Kuwait, when one
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member
 of the family has
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 the end of the
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 he will recharged with free time
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 the second week after.
This
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opporutunity
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opportunity
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pushing
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 his limit or
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 their limit.  In
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summary
,
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 would concede that punishing in order of teaching is an
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ineffective
 strategy and lower
down
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the level of the mentality of people which can be
harmfull
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harmful
 to their life
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.
While
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 a gift and
reward
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enorumos
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enormous
advanteges
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advantages
to
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 children and make them feel as much as they give they will always find something in advance.
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grammatical range
Work on improving your sentence structure and grammar usage.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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