The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major

 categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.
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between
five
different countries, namely the United
States
,
Canada
, and the United Kingdom about their expenditure on
five
categories in 2009.
Overall
, it is noticeable that
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all
five
countries allocated most of their budget
on
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housing,
while
the reverse was true for Health care. In detail, in terms of the amount of money that expenditures on Food, the figure for Japan was the highest at 23%,
while
the lowest was observed in the United
States
at 13%.The proportion of expenditures for Food
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the United Kingdom was over 20%, which
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than that in the figure
Canada
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by 6%.
Moreover
, the United
States
allocated more than 25% of their budget
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housing, followed by the United Kingdom, Japan and
Canada
at 24%, 22% and approximately 20% respectively. When it comes to transportation, there was 17% of
money
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that the United
States
spent on,
whereas
Canada
spent 20% on their amount of money which is twice as much as in the figure for Japan. Health care and Clothing witnessed only a fraction in the proportion of expenditures by all
five
countries, which
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3% to 7% for
the
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Health care and 4% to 6% for
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Clothing.
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