The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major

categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom,

and Japan in the year 2009.
The vertical chart makes a comparison between the expenditures for five majors in 4 different nations in 2009.
Overall
, the highest expenditure was housing,
meanwhile
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the opposite was true for health care and clothing. In detail, the proportion of Americans
spent
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their
time
on food, transportation and health care was 12%, 17%, and 7% respectively,
while
the figure for housing was 25%, which is 5 times as much as expenditure on clothing. Meanwhile, there was a similar percentage of
time
allocated for housing and transportation by Canadians at 20%, followed by the
time
allocated for food, clothing and healthcare at 15%, 5% and over 5% respectively.
On the other hand
, the United Kingdom and Japan experienced a minor difference in
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of 5 categories, with the largest gap being seen in transportation at 10%.
Besides
that, the share of expenditure on Food and health care witnessed Japan’s citizens allocated 23% and 4% of their
time
respectively, which is 2% higher than that in the United Kingdom.
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