The graphs below shows the annual visitor spend for visitors to New Zealand from 5 countries for the years 1996 to 2014.

The graphs below shows the annual visitor spend for visitors to New Zealand from 5 countries for the years 1996 to 2014.
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The line graph illustrates the
unnual
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annual
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spent for visitors to New Zealand from 5
coutries
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countries
for the years 1996 to 2014.
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Overall
Ovearall
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,during
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eighteen-year period,Australians remained the biggest profit in 2006, with all other four
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visitors spending much less on them. In 2002 visitors from The UK consumption
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decreased
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The USA and Japan spent about as much as each other.
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,by 2010, the gap in spending between these two countries had widened and considerably more money was spent from The USA than from The UK. As can be seen from the graph, the amount
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spent in all five countries
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rose the most dramatically in China. In 2004 was a sharp growth but profit in 2008 go down.
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