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The diagram below represents the “Comparison of how urban Chinese spent across major categories in 1995 versus the spending habits in 2011”. Summarise the information given in the diagrams.

The diagram below represents the “Comparison of how urban Chinese spent across major categories in 1995 versus the spending habits in 2011”. Summarise the information given in the diagrams.
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The pie chart shows the comparison of how urban
chinese
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Chinese
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 spent across major
categories
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 in 1995 versus 2011. In 1995 well over 50%
od
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of
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 the spending was
done
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spent
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 on
food
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. In 2011, the spending habits
are
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were
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 more distributed over the different types of
categories
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. In 1995, the majority of the
spend
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 was done on
food
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. Other major spending entities were on clothing with 14% of the total spend and 10% on recreation. Eight
percent
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 of the spending was on residential, 7% on household facilities, 5% on transportation, 3% on medicine and 3% were miscellaneous expenses. In 2011, there was a more even distribution of spend across the
categories
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. The
spend
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spending
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 on
food
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droped
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dropped
 to 36%,
along with
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 a drop in clothing
expense
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expenses
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 to 11%. At the same time,
spend
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 on recreation slightly increased to 12%. There is a significant growth in transportation and medicine taking it to 14% and 7% respectively.
Spend
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Spending
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 on residential is 12%, household facilities is 7% and other unknown expenses at 4%. All in all, the
spend
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spending
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 on
food
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 by the urban
chinese
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Chinese
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 remained higher than all the other
categories
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 over the time
perios
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period
periods
 shown in the charts.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words categories, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "droped" was used 2 times.
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