The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
These bar charts present the sum of
students
of graduate and postgraduate
level
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levels
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who did not work full-time after completing their
study
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studies
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in 2008. Here, we can see that the rate of engagement in the
further
study
is the highest in both groups. A
minimun
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minimum
number
of
students
joined voluntary
works
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work
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. On the one hand, 29,665 graduate
students
headed to
further
study
.
Besides
, 17735
students
started a part-time job.
Additionally
, A large
number
of
students
remained unemployed and the rate is near to
the
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that
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part-time
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workers.
Furthermore
, Only 3500
students
engaged themselves in voluntary
works
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work
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.
This
is the lowest
number
in
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on
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the Chart of graduate
students
.
On the other hand
, a
little
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small
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number
of
students
completed post-graduation compared to
gratuate
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graduate
students
. The highest
number
of
students
started
further
study
and the second highest
number
of
students
joined a part-time job. The
number
of unemployed
students
was 1625 and only 315
students
started working voluntarily.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, study, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic pursuit
  • temporary employment
  • voluntary work
  • further studies
  • part-time work
  • full-time employment
  • data representation
  • statistical comparison
  • post-educational paths
  • job market
  • unemployment rate
  • career advancement
  • skill development
  • lifelong learning
  • employment sector
  • vocational training
  • economic trends
  • workforce participation
  • career aspirations
  • higher education
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