The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
males
and females in a country in Asia who already passed the driving test from 1980 to 2010. In general, most of the categories of females witnessed an upward trend, except in 2010.
Moreover
,
although
the highest percentage of
males
passed their driving test was in 2000 and 2010, there were both highest in 2000 in 2 genders. In women's columns, there was a fluctuating increase in the proportions of passed females from nearly 50
percent
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to around 70
percent
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between 1980 and 2000.
However
,
this
figure decreased to over 60
percent
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in 2010 and stayed at the second rate among these categories. The highest percentage of
males
was in 2000, at 50
percent
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, and remained the same unchanged in the next 10 years.
However
, in 1980, the proportion of
males
was still the lowest, at under 30
percent
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which was the bottom among these categories.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Pass rate
  • Driving test
  • Trend
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Milestone
  • Comparison
  • Significant difference
  • Broad social changes
  • Policy changes
  • Surpass
  • Reflect
  • Implications
  • Disparity
  • Overall trends
  • Summarize
  • Statistical data
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