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The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
males
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 and females in a country in Asia who already passed the driving test from 1980 to 2010. In general, most of the categories of females witnessed an upward trend, except in 2010.
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 the highest percentage of
males
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 passed their driving test was in 2000 and 2010, there were both highest in 2000 in 2 genders. In women's columns, there was a fluctuating increase in the proportions of passed females from nearly 50
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percent
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per cent
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 to around 70
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percent
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 between 1980 and 2000.
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this
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 figure decreased to over 60
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percent
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 in 2010 and stayed at the second rate among these categories. The highest percentage of
males
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 was in 2000, at 50
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percent
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, and remained the same unchanged in the next 10 years.
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, in 1980, the proportion of
males
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 was still the lowest, at under 30
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 which was the bottom among these categories.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words males, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Pass rate
  • Driving test
  • Trend
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Milestone
  • Comparison
  • Significant difference
  • Broad social changes
  • Policy changes
  • Surpass
  • Reflect
  • Implications
  • Disparity
  • Overall trends
  • Summarize
  • Statistical data
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