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the charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of noutrientd, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

the charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of noutrientd, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
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The given pie graphs reflect the proportions of certain nutrients in different
meals
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 that could do harm to the physical health if it is consumed in high amounts. The provided charts manifest three different types of nutrient:
sodium
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, saturated fat, and added
sugar
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,
as well as
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, four different kinds of
meals
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: breakfast, dinner, lunch, and
snacks
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.
Overall
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, after a thorough analysis of the provided pie charts, it can be plainly viewed that will breakfast meal comes in the first place as the healthiest meal among all other
meals
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, dinner comes
last
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due to
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 the high level of
sodium
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 and saturated fat that are contained within
this
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 meal.
Additionally
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,
according to
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 the provided data,
snacks
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 are rich with added
sugar
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along with
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 saturated fat.
In addition
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 to that lunch
meals
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 are rich with
sodium
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 ( 29%) and saturated fats (26%),
while
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 added
sugar
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 only score 19% in the same
meals
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. In the beginning, regarding
snacks
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,
this
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 type of foods is full with unhealthy nutrients with 42 per cent added
sugar
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, followed by saturated fats which hit 21%.
Furthermore
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,
sodium
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 percentage is 14% in
snacks
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.
Moreover
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, moving to dinner
meals
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 , the pie graphs data clearly shows that
sodium
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 is in the first place as the most commonly unhealthy nutrient and scores 43%, followed by saturated fat and added
sugar
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 which record 37% and 23%, respectively.
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, it is worth noticing that the percentages of the unhealthy nutrients in breakfast are approximately the same with 14% for
sodium
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 and 16 per cent for added
sugar
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 and saturated fat equally.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words meals, sodium, sugar, snacks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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