the table below gives information about mangement posiotions held by women in a european country in 2006. summarise the information by selecting ard reporting the main features. and make comparsions where relevant.
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The table depicts data about management roles held by women in four industries in 2006.
Overall
, it is noticeable that hospitality had the largest proportion of management, whereas
manufacturing lowest. Moreover
, managers
in hospitality obtained the highest percentage, while
CEOs
in manufacturing smallest throughout the period.
To begin
with finance, executives
accounted for 4.58% which is 2 times smaller than managers
(16.39%). Therefore
, CEOs
obtained only 1.98%. In terms of manufacturing, executives
and CEOs
shared similar proportion
namely 1.98% and 1.21 % respectively. Fix the agreement mistake
proportions
Consequently
, managers
had approximately 9 %.
With regards to IT, managers
accounted for 16.04% which is over two times bigger than CEOs
6.58%. Furthermore
, executives
obtained only 12.82 %. The rate for hospitality particularly managers
had 33.14%, whereas
executives
accounted for only 19.9%.However
, in terms of CEOs
it had approximately 20.6%.Submitted by aikumarbekarys on
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