The chart below shows the average money spent per costumer on various types of equipment in a Canadian sports store

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this

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show

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how the

costumer

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customers

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sent money

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for

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rugby,football,

tinees

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tennis

and swimming equipment in

canada

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Canada

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between 2000 and 2020.

According to

what is shown, in 2000, rugby spent around 40

dollars

on equipment, but it

peaking

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at 60$ in 2010.

Then

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fell slowly until returned to the starting spent in 2015. After that, rugby

drpped

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dropped

sharply to 30.00$ in 2020.

While

, the

tinees

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trainees

tines

in first years

costumer

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customer

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spend about 30$, but it reduced

sightly

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slightly

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to end of

this

period by 10

dollars

Wherears

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Whereas

, the

costumer

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customer

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in football

spend

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almost 60$

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equipment in 2000. After that, it dipped dramatically to 40

dollars

in 2010, after 5 years

retuned

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to 60$ spent

then

it grew

teeply

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deeply

steeply

to 70$.

However

, in 2000, swimming spend was

roes

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rose

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gradually from 10$ in 2000 to 30

dollars

in 2020.

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