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The chart below shows the average money spent per costumer on various types of equipment in a Canadian sports store

The chart below shows the average money spent per costumer on various types of equipment in a Canadian sports store
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show
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shows
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 how the
costumer
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customers
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 sent money
of
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for
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 rugby,football,
tinees
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tennis
 and swimming equipment in
canada
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Canada
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 between 2000 and 2020.
According to
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 what is shown, in 2000, rugby spent around 40
dollars
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 on equipment, but it
peaking
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 at 60$ in 2010.
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,
if
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it
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 fell slowly until returned to the starting spent in 2015. After that, rugby
drpped
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dropped
 sharply to 30.00$ in 2020.
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, the
tinees
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trainees
tines
 in first years
costumer
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customer
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 spend about 30$, but it reduced
sightly
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slightly
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 to end of
this
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 period by 10
dollars
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.
Wherears
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Whereas
, the
costumer
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customer
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 in football
spend
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spent
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 almost 60$
of
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on
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 equipment in 2000. After that, it dipped dramatically to 40
dollars
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 in 2010, after 5 years
retuned
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returned
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 to 60$ spent
then
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 it grew
teeply
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deeply
steeply
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 to 70$.
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, in 2000, swimming spend was
roes
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rose
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 gradually from 10$ in 2000 to 30
dollars
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 in 2020.
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