A government's role is only to provide defence capability and urban infrastructure, such as roads, water and power. All other services, such as education, health and social security, should be provided by private groups or individuals in the community. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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In the modern world, many
people
prefer to live in a big town because they think that if they live in a big city, they will have a good future and these places have new technology than rural cities. While
other think that people
who live in a big city will have physical problems because they do not have time
to work out. So, this
essay will discuss this
statement and will give reasons, and ways how to help with this
problem.
To begin
with, the reason why people
do not exercise. First of all, many people
do not have time
to exercise due to
they are working for a
long hours like my brother, he has been living in Bangkok, and he is working more than 8 hours per day so, he thinks that if he goes to fitness, he will spend many times there, and he does not like it. Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
Therefore
, I think that the most reason
Correct word choice
important reason
that is
why the new generation does not work out because their time
.
On the other hand
, I think that time
for moving bodies is not important, and I believe that if everyone prefers to work out, they can change their style. For instance
, they can wake up in the morning and walk to the office. Thus
, I think that the best way to solve this
problem is to change people
's attitudes.
To sum up
, I think that the first reason why people
do not exercise because
of their attitude, and the best way to solve Add a missing verb
is because
this
situation is to change their attitude.Submitted by itchayatop31 on
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Coherence & Cohesion
The essay lacks a clear structure and organization. The introduction and conclusion need improvement to effectively frame the discussion. The main points are not clearly developed or supported with sufficient detail or examples.
Task Achievement
The essay partially addresses the task by discussing reasons for people not exercising and proposing changing attitudes as a solution. However, the response lacks depth and does not fully develop the arguments. It also does not fully consider the advantages and disadvantages of living in big cities.
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