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The chart below shows the total numbers of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995 to 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total numbers of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995 to 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 the data about
duration
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the duration
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 of telephone calls in the
Uk
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UK
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, between three different lines from 1995 to 2002. 
Overall
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, the local fixed
line
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 was the most common one used at that time. The number of
minutes
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 for National and international- fixed
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line
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lines
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 and mobiles increased, but the local- fixed
line
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 peaked and dropped.
Firstly
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, from the year 1995, the local- fixed
line
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was
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increased
upto
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up to
 90
minutes
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 (billions) by 1999 and declined to 70
minutes
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 and the end of 2002.
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, looking at the National and international- fixed which gradually increased from the duration of 35
minutes
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 to 60
minutes
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 by the end.
On the other hand
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,
the
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apply
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mobiles( all calls) showed
the
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a
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 drastic change from almost zero to 45
billions
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billion
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 by 2002.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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