The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.

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The presented tables enumerates in percentage of

population

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the population

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aged 65 and above in three different countries in 1988, 2000, and after thirty years. By looking at the

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, it can be inferred that by 2030, Canada is predicted

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the biggest difference

percentage

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in percentage

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population

. As can be observed from the figure,

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the UK

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population

in 1988

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14.23%, in 12 years after slowly

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by 0.66% difference, and will become 20.35% in 2030.

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it had the biggest difference in number,

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by 2030,

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the UK

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will have the smallest

population

. Canada was the second rank of

population

with 16.32%, in 2000 the number of

population

had grown to 20.67% and in projection, 30 years later it will be more than a quarter.

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, Germany

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had the biggest

population

of people aged 65 and over in 1988 still had the same position in 2000 but with more than 25%. after three decades Germany is predicted to have the biggest

population

of all three different countries. The

population

will be more than 30%.

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