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The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.

The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.
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The presented tables enumerates in percentage of
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population
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the population
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 aged 65 and above in three different countries in 1988, 2000, and after thirty years. By looking at the
detail
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details
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, it can be inferred that by 2030, Canada is predicted
have
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 the biggest difference
percentage
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in percentage
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 of
population
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. As can be observed from the figure,
UK
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the UK
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has
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had
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 the
leats
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least
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population
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 in 1988
with
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at
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 14.23%, in 12 years after slowly
increased
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increasing
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 by 0.66% difference, and will become 20.35% in 2030.
Although
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 it had the biggest difference in number,
but
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by 2030,
UK
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the UK
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 will have the smallest
population
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. Canada was the second rank of
population
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 with 16.32%, in 2000 the number of
population
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 had grown to 20.67% and in projection, 30 years later it will be more than a quarter.
In addition
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, Germany
that
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which
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 had the biggest
population
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 of people aged 65 and over in 1988 still had the same position in 2000 but with more than 25%. after three decades Germany is predicted to have the biggest
population
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 of all three different countries. The
population
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 will be more than 30%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage change
  • population
  • aged 65 and above
  • information
  • table
  • data
  • trends
  • patterns
  • comparison
  • predicted
  • future
  • findings
  • comment
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