The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.

The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.
The presented tables enumerates in percentage of
population
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the population
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aged 65 and above in three different countries in 1988, 2000, and after thirty years. By looking at the
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, it can be inferred that by 2030, Canada is predicted
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the biggest difference
percentage
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in percentage
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of
population
. As can be observed from the figure,
UK
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the UK
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has
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the
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population
in 1988
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14.23%, in 12 years after slowly
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by 0.66% difference, and will become 20.35% in 2030.
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it had the biggest difference in number,
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by 2030,
UK
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the UK
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will have the smallest
population
. Canada was the second rank of
population
with 16.32%, in 2000 the number of
population
had grown to 20.67% and in projection, 30 years later it will be more than a quarter.
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, Germany
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had the biggest
population
of people aged 65 and over in 1988 still had the same position in 2000 but with more than 25%. after three decades Germany is predicted to have the biggest
population
of all three different countries. The
population
will be more than 30%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage change
  • population
  • aged 65 and above
  • information
  • table
  • data
  • trends
  • patterns
  • comparison
  • predicted
  • future
  • findings
  • comment
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