ou recently had your computer fixed at a local store however you are not pleased with the service you received write a letter to the store manager in the letter describe the situation explain why you are dissatisfied say what you want the manager to do

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am a regular customer

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your store, and I am writing to you today to express my disappointment with the service I received from you.

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week, I visited the store in order to repair my laptop because it was slow and I could not open some websites.I was told to come back in 2 days and pay a 100$ fee ,which I did happily.

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,when I arrived

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the shop I was told that it

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not ready yet and I needed to wait 4 hours.

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, I needed to pay 20$ more.

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, when I arrived home I was surprised that my laptop still

has

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the same problems,which prevented me from finishing the work I needed to do. I am expecting you to fix

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problem and repair my laptop as soon as possible.

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apply

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compensation for the damage you did to my work is required. For

further

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information, you can contact me on my phone

061122334455

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at 061122334455

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. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully. Katty EL.

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coherence cohesion

Improve the logical structure of the letter to ensure a clear and organized flow of ideas.

coherence cohesion

Include a more respectful and formal greeting and closing to address the store manager appropriately.

coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph discusses only one main idea to enhance clarity and coherence.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

172 words

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