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You recently went to a restaurant and were very disappointed in the level of customer service. . Your email should include the following things: • Describe your situation • Complain about the service • Suggest solutions to improve

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Dear Restaurant Owner, Yesterday evening , I and my family members booked a
table
 to celebrate my son's birthday in your restaurant . Having been to your restaurant many times , I was extremely disappointed with your service yesterday.
To begin
 with,after arriving at the hotel we noticed that our pre-booked
table
 was occupied by other customers .We requested the staff to allocate a new
table
 and it almost took 45 minutes to arrange the
table
 .
Additionally
 ,the waitress didn't show up for an hour to take the order. We planned to leave the
table
due to
 the wait time but
unfortunately
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 we had to stay because I already paid the bill for the package I had chosen.Apparently, the food taste is at its minimal.
Furthermore
, I observed that a plethora of customers were annoyed
due to
 the long waiting time to place the order . Knowing you for many years, I would recommend you to improve the administration and the supply chain. Regards, Vikram Kallem .
Submitted by vicky.kallem on

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