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The pie charts below show units of eletricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The pie charts below show units of eletricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan
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The graphs
provides
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provide
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 a clear visual image of the proportion of electricity units that
using
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use
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 5
diffrent
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different
type
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types
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 of
fule
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fuel
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 in
France
 and
Australia
 in 1980 and two decades after.
Overall
, Coal is the most
commen
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common
 source of electricity in
australia
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Australia
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 in both mentioned years.
Also
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Also,
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 Coal and
Hydro
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Hydropower
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power
 was the most
produtive
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productive
fules
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files
fuels
 in 1980 in
France
 which
are
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were
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 replaced by Nuclear
power
 up to 2000.
In
addition
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addition,
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 the
tendecy
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tendency
of
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for
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Hydro
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Hydropower
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power
 during these years stay almost the same in
Australia
 from 20 units among 100 to 36 units among 170.
Moreover
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this
 type of energy is the less popular one among others in
France
 which take part under 10
percent
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per cent
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 of total use. Another mentionable source is Nuclear
power
that
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which
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makes
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made
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near
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nearly
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two-third
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two-thirds
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 of
France
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France's
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 electricity in 2000 but it
did not used in
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used in Australia neither
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Australia
 neither
1980
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in 1980
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nor
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or
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 2000.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, australia, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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