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the graph below shows the populations in india and china since the year of 2000and predicts populations growth untill 2050

the graph below shows the populations in india and china since the year of 2000and predicts populations growth untill 2050
#populations #india #china #year #growth #untill
the given graph provides information containing the populations
in
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India
 and
China
 in 2000 and
it's
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their
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 predictions until 2050. generally speaking, the populations both in
India
 and
China
 increased from the beginning until the end of the period. from the data
that's
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it's
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 clear that in 2000, there
is
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were
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 no people
lived
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living
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 in
India
, but it rocketed constantly year by year and
being
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is
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 predicted
reach
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to reach
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 about 1.6 billion
peoples
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people
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 in 2050. unlike
India
's citizens, in
China
 there were just above 1.2 billion
peoples
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people
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lived
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living
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 in 2000, it slightly went up and forecasted will reach
it's
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its
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 peak in 2030, about 1.45 billion, as much as the citizens in
India
at
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in
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 the same year. After that, the population in
China
 will slowly
decreased
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decrease
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just
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to just
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 below 1.4
billions
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billion
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at the end
 of the period.
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