The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram shows the procedure and tools utilized for producing
cement
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, and how the produced
cement
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is processed into concrete used for buildings.
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, both procedures consist of mixing several
ingredients
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together to form an aggregate final product using a mixer
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three additional steps are done in the production process of
cement
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which are crushing, heating, and grinding the mixed
ingredients
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. The
ingredients
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for making
cement
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, which are limestone and clay are first crushed into powder before being mixed. After the powders are mixed, they enter the rotating heater to be heated to a certain level of temperature. The heated aggregate is
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ground to create the
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powder, ready to be packaged into
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bags. The produced
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powders are
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used in the
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concrete production process as one of the mixed
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for the concrete aggregate. Gravel as the major composing ingredient of the concrete takes a half portion of the mix,
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the other half of the concrete is composed of sand,
cement
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, and water with only 25%, 15%, and 10% of the total portion.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cement, ingredients with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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