Comparison of Energy Production The pie charts show information about energy production in a country in two separate years.

Comparison of Energy Production The pie charts show information about energy production in a country in two separate years.
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The pie charts above give
informations
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about how
produce
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energy in a nation in different years (1995 and 2005).
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, it is easy to see that coals
is
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the main material in energy production.
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, the
decreasing
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in
pecentage
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percentage
of petro was the biggest among other types. Using coals always constituted the highest amount in 1995 and 2005 which is 29.80% and 30.93%, respectively. The second position belonged to gas. The figure for
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material was merely less
0.17
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% than coals in 1995 and after 10 years it slightly increased
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0.68%. Petro had witnessed a remarkable drop from 29.27% to 19.55% over a
10 years
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10-year
period. Other types making up the smallest amount in 1995 was 4.09%,
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, it was as two-fold as that in 2005. The percentage of nuclear
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gently
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higher than
other type
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another type
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of materials in 1995. It was as
three fifth
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as
its
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it was
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in 2005
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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