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The bar chart below shows the percentage participation of men in senior development in three companies between 1980 and the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows the percentage participation of men in senior development in three companies between 1980 and the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage take part of
male
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males
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 in senior development in the three companies,
IBM
,
Microsoft
 and
Apple
 between 1980 and the year 2010.
Overall
,
company
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a company
the company
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 of
Apple
 was higher during the three years and after that
little
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a little
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 bit increased but not much
and
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apply
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IBM
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IBM's
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 lowest started in 1980 at 5% and remained steady in 1985,
Microsoft
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with Microsoft
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 and
Apple
 at 8%,12%in 1980,in 1985
was
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apply
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10,11%.
Furthermore
,
IBM
 firm increased in 1990
at
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to
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 11%,
in
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and in
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 1995 it was higher
almost
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by almost
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 25%
moreover
,
Microsoft
 and
Apple
 increased but lower than
IBM
 in 1995 it was approximately 20%.
Last
 but not least,in 2000 and 2010
IBM
 dramatically went up and now it was 31% and 62% highest percentage
in
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at
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 the end of the period.
Microsoft
also
 increased in 2010
reached at
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reaching
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 45% and in 2010
Apple
 was
lowest
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the lowest
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 percentage.
IBM
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IBM's
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started
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starting
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 point was so low but it grew
ver
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very
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 sharply.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words ibm, microsoft, apple with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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