The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people who consumed five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK over 8 years, which is from 2001 to 2008.
The bar chart shows
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the proportion of individuals who utilized five different types of fruits and vegetables in a day in the Correct word choice
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Uk
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UK
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, which is from 2001 to 2008.Overall
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secondly
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children.
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beginning
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past
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in past
years
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the next
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from 2005 to 2008.whereas
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