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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people who consumed five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK over 8 years, which is from 2001 to 2008.

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people who consumed five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK over 8 years, which is from 2001 to 2008.
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The bar chart shows
that
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the proportion of individuals who utilized five different types of fruits and vegetables in a day in the
Uk
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UK
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 over 8
years
, which is from 2001 to 2008.
Overall
, as you can see
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women were top of the list to consume these things and
secondly
 men were
also
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the
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children. Observing the details,
it is clear that
 children
were
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consumed fruits and vegetables starting
to
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13
in during
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 2001 to 2003 and 17 in 2004
that
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 was high from previous
years
.
In addition
,men were
also
 remaining
to
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 17 in the
biggining
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beginning
years
 same
like
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 kids
moreover
,women
were
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increased
that
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in that
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 period.
Conversely
,males and toddlers
again
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 lower than
the
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women but their consumption increased
past
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in past
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years
 they were 18,23,26 and 24,27 during
next
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the next
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 four
years
 from 2005 to 2008.
whereas
,
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females consume hygienic food in 2006 sharply went up
at
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to
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it
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which
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 was
highest
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the highest
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 portion.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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