You brought some dog food from a store, and it turned out to be the expired one. Write a letter to the store manager about this.

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing a

complain

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the wrong item is being sold in your store. Whenever I use the product from your shop I don't find any wrong item.

However

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, I bought pet food

last

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Saturday and I found it was expired.

Besides

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this

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, my cat is sick

due to

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this

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item and the doctor said to me that she ate something bad. When I remembered I gave him only cookies at night.

Furthermore

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, one of my neighbours has

also

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purchased the same product and his dog

also

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feels sick. I think it was not a coincidence that two pets

sickened

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were sickened

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at the same time.

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, it is your products which are being infected by the animals. If these animals are continuously affected

then

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we will close your shop. I request you to stop selling these products as early as possible.

Although

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, you could check items before purchasing the pet food. If you do for the sake of animals you will save their lives. I am looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. Yours Faithfully

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task response

Ensure that the complaints and concerns are clearly and directly expressed in relation to the pet food issue.

coherence and cohesion

Organize the letter with clear paragraphs, each focused on a single idea or aspect of the complaint.

lexical resource

Use a wider range of vocabulary to express the concerns and complaints more effectively.

grammatical range

Work on the use of appropriate grammar and sentence structures to improve clarity and cohesiveness in the letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

180 words

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