You brought some dog food from a store, and it turned out to be the expired one. Write a letter to the store manager about this.

Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing a
complain
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complaint
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the wrong item is being sold in your store. Whenever I use the product from your shop I don't find any wrong item.
However
, I bought pet food
last
Saturday and I found it was expired.
Besides
this
, my cat is sick
due to
this
item and the doctor said to me that she ate something bad. When I remembered I gave him only cookies at night.
Furthermore
, one of my neighbours has
also
purchased the same product and his dog
also
feels sick. I think it was not a coincidence that two pets
sickened
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at the same time.
Hence
, it is your products which are being infected by the animals. If these animals are continuously affected
then
we will close your shop. I request you to stop selling these products as early as possible.
Although
, you could check items before purchasing the pet food. If you do for the sake of animals you will save their lives. I am looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. Yours Faithfully
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task response
Ensure that the complaints and concerns are clearly and directly expressed in relation to the pet food issue.
coherence and cohesion
Organize the letter with clear paragraphs, each focused on a single idea or aspect of the complaint.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to express the concerns and complaints more effectively.
grammatical range
Work on the use of appropriate grammar and sentence structures to improve clarity and cohesiveness in the letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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