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The diagramillustratesthe process oflithography: a method used for printing newspapers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where necessary. Write at least 150 words

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The diagram illustrates the
process
 of newspaper's generation. You
cab
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can
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 see different stages of
cycle
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the cycle
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 in
manufactory
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the factory
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.as we see in the picture the generation cycle is organized by conveyor belt and
wheels
 and gears. First of
all
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 manufacturers draw designs and get the news
of
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 journalists.
Secondly
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 they should prepare formats board that we make and arrange pages
according to
the
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this
 boards. Another important stage is
ink
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the ink
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 tank
that
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it
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 is
in
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 the beginning of the
process
.
Then
 the machine
turned
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 on and
wheels
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the wheels
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helps
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belt
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the belt
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 to circulate
whole
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the whole
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 of
machine
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the machine
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.
In
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this
 time paper is brought into a
machin
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machine
in
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 the second
stages
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stage
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wheels
 pull papers among the
wheels
 that they
submersibled
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submersible
submersibles
 in the ink tank. The
wheels
 press the papers and print text and pictures on pages.
Finally
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 those leaves for a
while
 and get dry with cold and warm air's help.
This
process
called
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is called
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 lithography and very important technology in
humen's life indeed
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humans ' lives
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. Humen's life
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is accociated
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accociated
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associated
by
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with
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printing
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the printing
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 industry
due to
 we surrounded by many billboards and signs that we need them indeed. The
process
 is simple and
need
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to many
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equipments
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equipment
 and two important things: paper and ink.
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear structure and logical sequence of ideas. The introduction and conclusion are present but need improvement. There is an attempt to support the main points, but the points are not well-developed and lack clarity of ideas.
task achievement
The response does not fully address the task. The main features of the process are briefly mentioned, but the comparison is not effectively done. The essay needs to provide a more detailed and accurate description of the process with appropriate comparisons.
lexical resource
The essay demonstrates a limited range of vocabulary and lacks precision in describing the process. There are also issues with word choice and expression. Consider using a wider range of vocabulary and more accurate descriptions of the stages of the lithography process.
grammatical range
There are significant grammatical issues in sentence structure, verb tense, and agreement. The essay also contains punctuation and capitalization errors. Focus on improving sentence structure, accurate verb usage, and grammatical accuracy to convey ideas clearly.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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