People are consuming more and more sugar-based drinks. Why? What can be done to reduce sugary drink consumption?
Although
sugar-based minerals are scientifically proven to be one of the primary culprits of obesity and other metabolic diseases, the consumption of these products
has been increasing in recent years. This
essay will put forward some causes that contribute to this
trend and propose a few feasible solutions to mitigate the situation.
To begin
with, there are two main reasons for this
negative upswing. Firstly
, sugary drinks
are inexpensive and easily stored because they are composed of cheap ingredients namely water, sugar flavouring agent and preservatives but at the same time, their taste is adjusted to be similar to fresh and pure products
or even better. Therefore
, instead
of making fresh orange juice which takes more time and money, consumers
might prefer to buy a big cheap can of orange drink and use it for several days without any effort. Secondly
, drinking corporations have launched multiple advertising campaigns to promote the consumption of sugary drinks
since these products
could drive huge profits for them. For example
, the Coca-Cola company has spent billions of dollars on their worldwide advertisement, with the involvement of many celebrities and television shows and this
has made their production, which is a sugary and carbonated drink, one of the most popular drinks
in the whole world.
Fortunately, there are some measures that can be adopted to reverse this
trend. First of all, the government need to raise the taxes on sugary drinks
since drinking corporations have made a huge profit from their mass production. As a result
, the final prices of these unhealthy drinks
will be increased so that consumers
will look for alternative options. In addition
, label marking needs to be compulsory for all drinking products
to discriminate minerals with high and low levels of sugar. Finally
, supermarkets can place sugary drinks
as well as
other unhealthy products
in far corners that their customers barely visit so that consumers
can consider healthier options in the first place.
In conclusion, the number of sugar-based consumers
has been rising because of its low prices and convenient features, along with
marketing campaigns of the manufacturing companies. However
, both the government and societies can take steps to address this
pressing issue, including higher taxes, label marking and in-store location arrangements for unhealthy products
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