The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.

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The given line chart illustrates the trend of changing in the rate of gold sale in

dubai

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during 12 months.

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it is clear that

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the graph shows

fluctuation

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a fluctuation

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rate which

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hits its maximum rate in March and the minimum in

Julay

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July

and September.

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with, in the first month of the year, Dubai's gold sales

was

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200

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millions

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million

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Dirhams

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and in

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february

febraury

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it was increased by just 20

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millions

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million

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dirhams

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, March accounted for the

most

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highest

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proportion in 2002 with

was

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exactly 350

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millions

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million

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Dirhams

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. Over the following 4 months, the figure had a gradual decrease till

Julay

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July

which at the

sam

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same

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time saw the lower amount of sales in gold by nearly 100

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millions

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million

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Dirhams

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. As is shown by the graph, in August, the figure again experienced a significant

rose

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by 100

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millions

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million

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and

then

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fall

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fell

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to the same amount.

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, from September to the end of the year,

trend

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the trend

a trend

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was

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increased dramatically. Meanwhile, the

last

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three months of the year had

same

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the same

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figures which

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were approximatelly

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approximatelly

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approximately

180 in October, 180 in November and around 200

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millions

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million

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Dirhams

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in December.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, dirhams with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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6
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

184 words

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The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.

Around the world, rural people are moving to cities and urban areas, so populations in the countryside are decreasing. Is this a positive or negative development ?

Some people argue that spending a lot of money holding birthday parties, wedding parties and other celebration is a waste of money. However, others believe such parties are important for individuals and for society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, many employers think that social skills are as important as good qualifications for employing people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? what could be disadvantages fo being self employed?

In many countries today, if people want to find work, they have to move away from their friends and their families. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?