The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.

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The given line chart illustrates the trend of changing in the rate of gold sale in

dubai

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during 12 months.

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it is clear that

the graph shows

fluctuation

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rate which

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hits its maximum rate in March and the minimum in

Julay

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July

and September.

To begin

with, in the first month of the year, Dubai's gold sales

was

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200

millions

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million

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Dirhams

and in

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february

febraury

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it was increased by just 20

millions

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million

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dirhams

Additionally

, March accounted for the

most

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highest

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proportion in 2002 with

was

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exactly 350

millions

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million

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apply

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Dirhams

. Over the following 4 months, the figure had a gradual decrease till

Julay

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July

which at the

sam

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same

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time saw the lower amount of sales in gold by nearly 100

millions

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million

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Dirhams

. As is shown by the graph, in August, the figure again experienced a significant

rose

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by 100

millions

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million

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and

then

fall

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fell

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to the same amount.

Furthemore

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Furthermore

, from September to the end of the year,

trend

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the trend

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was

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increased dramatically. Meanwhile, the

last

three months of the year had

same

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the same

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figures which

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were approximatelly

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approximatelly

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approximately

180 in October, 180 in November and around 200

millions

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million

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Dirhams

in December.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, dirhams with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.

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in many countries, the level of crime is increasing. why do you think is and what can be done about it?

In many parts of the world there is continuous coverage of sports on television. Some people believe this discourages the young from taking part in any sports themselves. Discuss the view and give your opinion.