The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart
illustrate
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illustrates
percentage
of the Add an article
the percentage
differensies
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differences
of
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in
population
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the population
in
public who Change preposition
apply
lives
in and outside Correct subject-verb agreement
live
Australia
between 1995 and 2010.
The highest one was Cities
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City
areas
that outside
of the country and the lowest one Add a missing verb
were outside
also
was outside one
Rural Correct pronoun usage
apply
areas
.
Cities areas
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were
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rose
percentage
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the percentage
people
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the country
country
they had approximately 70% in 2010 Add a comma
country,
that
more Correct word choice
and
to
20% that was in 1995. They Change preposition
than
also
increase to 20% in outside areas
of Australia
that
account Correct pronoun usage
which
60
% and after 15 years glow to 80%. Towns in that case do not Change preposition
for 60
had
so big changes. Change the verb form
have
People
who born
in Add a missing verb
were born
Australia
from 1995 to 2010 had glow
down from 20% to Correct your spelling
grown
near
15%. Change the word
nearly
People
who lives
in Change the verb form
live
Australians
town does not change after 15 years and calculate about 10%. The biggest Correct your spelling
Australian
changes
was in Rural Fix the agreement mistake
change
areas
percentage
of Add an article
the percentage
individuasl
that Correct your spelling
individuals
individual
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were
Australia
that rocketly slide
from 40% to under 5%. Wrong verb form
slid
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Also,
people
who born
in the country was 2 Add a missing verb
were born
time
more in 1995 than in 2010.Change to a plural noun
times
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